black star of darkness

I like the poem, as I think it has a good, clear rhythm However, like others have said before me, it needs more of some punctuation, and some more imagery ...

Hey See you can write poems, It has a very good rhythm although I agree with an earlier comment that you have overused the word 'you' a bit Keep it ...

I think this is a very good poem for a girl as it is sweet However it is a bit cliched if you ask me as it uses the comparisons ...